NEWS WRITING for campus journalism .pptx

A guide for campus journalism news writing by Ramonito Elumbaring, SPA, The Coconut, QNHS

1. NEWS WRITING by RAMONITO O. ELUMBARING Adviser, The Coconut /Ang Niyog Quezon National High School

2. Session Outline News Story Deconstruction Types of News Stories in the School Paper News Pages of THE COCONUT and ANG NIYOG News Writing Production Process Using Story Planner in Writing News Stories News Writing Production (Choosing the Angle; Writing the Headline, Lead, Body, and Ending) Suggested Format of News Writing Analyzing a News Story Sample Writeshop

3. On viral urinal post We don’t tolerate homophobia – SSLG Prexy 1 Quezon National High School Supreme Student Learner Government (QNHS-SSLG) has condemned the homophobic remarks thrown by netizens on a picture posted on SSGL Facebook page showing its officers using the new toilet at the campus. 2 In an interview, SSLG President Zeus Eclavea expressed his dismay at the ‘double meaning’ comments regarding a student wearing a tote bag in the photo.

4. On viral urinal post We don’t tolerate homophobia – SSLG Prexy 1 Quezon National High School Supreme Student Learner Government (QNHS-SSLG) has condemned the homophobic remarks thrown by netizens on a picture posted on SSLG Facebook page showing its officers using the new toilet at the campus. 2 In an interview, SSLG President Zeus Eclavea expressed his dismay at the ‘double meaning’ comments regarding a student wearing a tote bag in the photo.

5. On viral urinal post We don’t tolerate homophobia – SSLG Prexy 1 Quezon National High School Supreme Student Learner Government (QNHS-SSLG) has condemned the homophobic remarks thrown by netizens on a picture posted on SSLG Facebook page showing its officers using the new toilet at the campus. 2 In an interview, SSLG President Zeus Eclavea expressed his dismay at the ‘double meaning’ comments regarding a student wearing a tote bag in the photo.

6. 3 “The QNHS SSLG expresses its denunciation over the issue. We are against the negative remarks thrown by some netizens to our members. We don’t tolerate homophobia,” Eclavea said. 4 In the popular post that garnered many ‘haha’ reactions from netizens, some mocked the male officer for wearing a tote bag saying that it is ‘obvious’ that he is part of the LGBTQIA+ community. 5 “In an educational institution like ours, there must be no room for discrimination and homophobia; in a society like ours, the heteronormative standards of how people should act or wear must be eliminated,” Eclavea stressed.

7. 6 He added that while they see nothing wrong with the said picture, they promise to practice sensitivity when it comes to posting photos online. 7 Meanwhile, the student body deleted the said photo to protect the student in the photo from cyberbullying due to the malicious comments. 8 The said photo published on the SSLG official page last September 23 as part of the documentation for the opening of a new toilet on campus donated by QNHS Batch ‘75 gained more than 7,000 reactions and shares on Facebook.

8. 9 Regarding the issue, QNHS Principal Jessie Vasquez proposed constructing all-gender bathrooms in the campus. 10 “There’s only one thing we can do about that — they should really be given a separate comfort room so they don’t have that kind of reaction,” the principal said. 11 He added that the toilets offered by Batch ‘75, particularly the women’s, men’s, and urinals, will only be replaced with signs. The urinal will be given to men while the men’s will be converted into an all-gender restroom. 12 “We haven’t yet designed a comfort room for all genders. Anyway, I think it is also necessary for LGBT people, particularly for the transgender. We are looking forward to also designing a comfort room for them,” Vasquez pointed out.

9. 13 The said plan gained support from QNHS students, including Kate Cabriga, who shared some points why she is in favor of the establishment of all-gender restrooms inside the campus. 14 “I feel like if we have gender-neutral restrooms na well-managed, mas magiging comfortable ‘yung students in the midst of their transgender journey because they will not be pressured sa restrooms na feeling nila ay hindi sila belong. It’s in having a safe space,” Cabriga highlighted. 15 She also mentioned the importance of spreading awareness on sexual orientation, gender identity and expression (SOGIE), especially inside an educational institution like QNHS.

10. Let’s process! What is the angle of the story? What type of school news is this article? Is the lead appropriate? Why? Which detail in the story is the most important? the least important? Do all the paragraphs follow one another in logical order, that is, each one blending smoothly with the preceding paragraphs?

11. Let’s process! 6. If space is not enough, which paragraphs can be deleted? Why? Are the paragraphs short? Is the vocabulary simple, clear, and precise? Are the facts complete and accurate? How are the facts arranged in the story?

12. Let’s process! 11. What news structure was used in writing this article? 12. Who and what are the sources of information in this article? 13. What methods of news gathering were employed?

13. Types of News Stories in the School Paper SCHOOL EVENT STORY SCHOOL ISSUE STORY COMMUNITY NEWS

14. Types of News Stories in the School Paper Straight News News Feature Special Report In-Depth News

15. PIT STOP #1 Name one topic that should be on the news page of the school paper.

16. News Page of THE COCONUT

17. Pit Stop #2 Where do we get these stories?

18. Pahinang Balita ng ANG NIYOG

19. Pit Stop #3 How do we acquire the information for these stories?

20. NEWS WRITING PRODUCTION PROCESS

21. NEWS WRITING PRODUCTION PROCESS News Team Meeting/Story Conference Accomplishing the Story Planner Data Gathering Writing the Draft Editing (by the News Editor) Revision Final Submission for Layouting Proofreading (by SPA)

22. Using Story Planner in WRITING NEWS STORIES

23. NEWS WRITING PRODUCTION

24. THE ANGLE The main idea of a news story or lead is called the “angle.” It is also referred to as the “hook” because it is used to grab or hook the reader’s attention.

25. THE ANGLE So how do you choose the angle of your story?

26. A news story is made or broken by its angle. To choose an angle, we should ask what is the most striking thing about this story? Identify specific angle of an event/issue as highlight of your story (news within a news) Once you find that, the story will write itself.

27. 1. The head should tell the gist of the story simply and accurately. Example: Quezon NHS SPED program gets ₱159K fund from DepED 2. The first letter of the first word and proper nouns are generally capitalized. Example: New PTA officers inducted; Pabelonia bares priority projects underway

28. 3. Use the historical present if the verb is in the active voice. Examples : -Grade 7 teachers undergo MATATAG curriculum training -Reyes tops editorial tilt 4. Omit the helping verb if the verb is in the passive voice. Only the past participle is retained. Wrong: Drug pushers are nabbed Correct: Drug pushers nabbed

29. 5. Use the infinitive for future events. Examples : -City Hall to punish anti-squatting drive -Quezon Province to host Palarong Pambansa in 2025 6 . Avoid the use of articles (a, an the) to begin a headline. Wrong: A fire hits Lucena slum area Correct: Fire hits Lucena slum area

30. 7 . Never use the word “may”. It shows the uncertain element of the story. Example: PH may host 2028 FIBA World Cup 8. Assertions in a headline should have sources. SC in peril says law experts No speaker, no SONA says House Opposition 9. Don’t convert verbs into noun. Wrong: Students urge oustering of the principal. Correct: Students urge to oust the principal. Examples:

31. 10. Use the shorter word whenever possible, e.g. use “cut” for decrease or “hike” for increase. Examples: Gov’t hikes oil prices Gov’t cuts oil subsidy 11. Be specific. Avoid generalities . Wrong: Student wins contest Right: Coco scribe wins nat’l essay writing tilt 12. Avoid label head Wrong: Journalism Workshop Right: The Coconut conducts journalism workshop

32. 13. Do not editorialize your headline. Wrong: The Coconut shows great performance in 2024 DSPC Right: The Coconut wins 6 out of 7 in 2018 DSPC writing contest 14. Do not use the same word twice in the headline or kicker. Example: Gun haul Quezon cops seize 24 guns from suspected bandits

33. 15. To use direct quotation as head, use any of the following forms instead of the traditional quotation marks: a. Using the dash instead of the quotation mark. Example: Sanctity of marriage remains - CBCP

34. b. Using the colon Example: Briones: PPST is the yardstick of quality c. Using narrative form Example : Teachers need help but not hopeless, says Briones

35. 16.Do not be in the negative. Wrong: Niyogyugan Festival won’t be held Right: Niyogyugan Festival cancelled

36. 17.Have a subject and a verb. Avoid starting with a verb; the headline might sound as if it were giving orders. Wrong: Revise policy on securing admission slips Right: Guidance Office revises policy on securing admission slips

37. 17.Don’t use names unless the person is well-known; use common nouns instead. Wrong: Surquia wins the region’s MOCJ tilt Right: Publication EIC wins the region’s MOCJ tilt

38. 18. Use widely-known abbreviations. Wrong: PBBM visits LC Correct: PBBM visits Lucena City

39. 19. Use comma instead of “and” in writing headlines . Wrong: Teachers and barangay officials revive bayanihan in Brigada Eskwela Correct: Teachers, barangay officials revive bayanihan in Brigada Eskwela

40. SAMPLE HEADLINES CARMAGEDDON Quezon NHS teachers, students battle heavy traffic, fear safety during afternoon dismissal 3 in 5 Quezon Highers are borderline poor – survey Amid mushrooming of QNHS clubs Quezon NHS Youth Formation Unit rolls out club accreditation process Arts, Sports Track ‘temporarily closed, not removed’ – Admin clarifies

41. SAMPLE HEADLINES NANLILIMOS NA TINIG Mas maigting na seguridad sa Ibabang Iyam, idinaing kasunod ng 2 kaso ng pagpatay Pangarap ang puhunan ALS, umarangkada kahit walang pondo ‘Body shaming’ sa Project BMI, hindi hahayaan — coordinator Serye ng nakawan sa Quezon NHS, hinihinalang inside job

42. SAMPLE HEADLINES ‘Mga bastos at walang modo’ 6 sa bawat 10 lumalabag sa mga polisiya ng paaralan, mula sa SHS — security office Kakulangan ng first aiders sa Quezon NHS, layong punan ng JSDRRM Mga guro, umapela ng tulong mula sa mga magulang ng ‘frustration readers’

43. THE LEAD the story’s opening sentence or two tells the most important facts of the story (in straight news) could be a word, a phrase, a sentence or a paragraph that attracts and sustain the readers’ interest (in feature article or news feature)

44. THE LEAD: TECHNICAL REQUIREMENTS be one sentence 1 be a maximum of 35 words 2 tell the most important piece of information that occurred in the event 3

45. THE LEAD: CONTENT REQUIREMENTS contain the main who, what, when and where of the story 1 be direct and simple 2 have the most important information 3 not try to tell everything but be should be good summaries 4

46. THE LEAD: CONTENT REQUIREMENTS include specific information 5 not begin with the “when” element 6 use a strong verb to describe the action 7 be accurate -- above all else. 8

47. Sample Leads Malacanang announced on Monday that all classes from elementary to high school in Metro Manila and CALABARZON on Tuesday have been suspended due to Typhoon Enteng. All classes from elementary to high school in Metro Manila and CALABARZON on Tuesday have been suspended due to Typhoon Enteng, Malacanang announced on Monday. Due to Typhoon Enteng, all classes from elementary to high school in Metro Manila and CALABARZON on Tuesday have been suspended, Malacanang announced on Monday. (WHO) (WHAT) (WHY)

48. Sample Leads from THE COCONUT 1. Quezon National High School (QNHS) students slam QNHS Guidance Office saying that its failure to distribute student handbook has caused them to commit violation unknowingly. 2. Amid hearsays that Arts & Design and Sports Track were removed due to lack of funding, Jessie Vasquez, Quezon National High School (QNHS) Principal, cleared out that these are just temporarily closed due to the low number of enrollees.

49. Sample Leads from THE COCONUT 3. Three of every five students of Quezon National High School (QNHS) consider themselves borderline poor, according to the survey by The Coconut last November 17. 4. C ongested, dark, and frightening. This is how Quezon National High School (QNHS) teachers and students describe their commuting experience after the 6:20 PM class dismissal brought by the two shifts of classes present due to a large enrollment this school year.

50. Sample Leads from ANG NIYOG 5. Umalingawngaw ang mga panawagan para sa mas mahigpit na pagbabantay matapos ang ulat ng magkasunod na insidente ng pagdakip at pagbaril sa Brgy. Ibabang Iyam, Lungsod ng Lucena noong Nobyembre 10 at 11. 6. S a kabila ng kawalan ng pondo, sinimulan na ng Quezon National High School (QNHS) ang pag-aalok ng Alternative Learning System (ALS) ngayong Taong Panuruan 2023-2024. 7. I nside job ang sinisilip na anggulo ng ilang kawani ng Quezon National High School (QNHS) sa likod ng sunod-sunod na nakawan sa kampus matapos ituro ng mga pruweba ang isang utility personnel bilang salarin.

51. Sample Leads from ANG NIYOG 8. S ana, maibigay sa amin ‘yung nararapat na suporta. Kung matutuloy man ‘yung phaseout, sana ay mas lakihan nila ‘yung ibibigay na tulong.” Ito ang hiling ni Jomar Dela Cruz, isang tsuper na namamasada sa Brgy. Ibabang Iyam sa Lucena City, hinggil sa napipintong ‘jeepney phaseout’ bunsod ng Public Utility Vehicle (PUV) Modernization Program ng gobyerno. 9. M apayapa. Malapit sa kabuhayan. May batas. Ganito inilarawan ng mga Badjao na nakatira sa tabing-dagat sa Brgy. Barra ang Lucena City sa isang panayam ng Ang Niyog noong Disyembre 5.

52. THE BODY

53. THE BODY the section that follows the lead and provides detailed information about the story elaborates on the features mentioned in the lead, offering a comprehensive explanation and additional context to satisfy the reader’s curiosity and interest

54. THE BODY After the lead, you introduce other important elements Additional facts Background Quotes Paraphrased information Transitions

55. Pit Stop #4 How do we prioritize the paragraphs in the body of a news story?

56. THE BODY PRIORITIZING PARAGRAPHS Significant supporting facts placed in order of importance Include strongest quotes higher than peripheral or paraphrased quotes

57. THE BODY ORGANIZING THE STORY After your lead, you will need to add necessary details or particulars to the story that would give flesh to the story All available facts are included here, particularly those that would answer the “why” and “how” Relevant past events are recounted and incorporated; this portion may be deleted

58. On viral urinal post We don’t tolerate homophobia – SSLG Prexy 1 Quezon National High School Supreme Student Learner Government (QNHS-SSLG) has condemned the homophobic remarks thrown by netizens on a picture posted on SSLG Facebook page showing its officers using the new toilet at the campus. 2 In an interview, SSLG President Zeus Eclavea expressed his dismay at the ‘double meaning’ comments regarding a student wearing a tote bag in the photo.

59. 3 “The QNHS SSLG expresses its denunciation over the issue. We are against the negative remarks thrown by some netizens to our members. We don’t tolerate homophobia,” Eclavea said. 4 In the popular post that garnered many ‘haha’ reactions from netizens, some mocked the male officer for wearing a tote bag saying that it is ‘obvious’ that he is part of the LGBTQIA+ community. 5 “In an educational institution like ours, there must be no room for discrimination and homophobia; in a society like ours, the heteronormative standards of how people should act or wear must be eliminated,” Eclavea stressed.

60. 6 He added that while they see nothing wrong with the said picture, they promise to practice sensitivity when it comes to posting photos online. 7 Meanwhile, the student body deleted the said photo to protect the student in the photo from cyberbullying due to the malicious comments. 8 The said photo published on the SSLG official page last September 23 as part of the documentation for the opening of a new toilet on campus donated by QNHS Batch ‘75 gained more than 7,000 reactions and shares on Facebook.

61. 9 Regarding the issue, QNHS Principal Jessie Vasquez proposed constructing all-gender bathrooms in the campus. 10 “There’s only one thing we can do about that — they should really be given a separate comfort room so they don’t have that kind of reaction,” the principal said. 11 He added that the toilets offered by Batch ‘75, particularly the women’s, men’s, and urinals, will only be replaced with signs. The urinal will be given to men while the men’s will be converted into an all-gender restroom. 12 “We haven’t yet designed a comfort room for all genders. Anyway, I think it is also necessary for LGBT people, particularly for the transgender. We are looking forward to also designing a comfort room for them,” Vasquez pointed out.

62. 13 The said plan gained support from QNHS students, including Kate Cabriga, who shared some points why she is in favor of the establishment of all-gender restrooms inside the campus. 14 “I feel like if we have gender-neutral restrooms na well-managed, mas magiging comfortable ‘yung students in the midst of their transgender journey because they will not be pressured sa restrooms na feeling nila ay hindi sila belong. It’s in having a safe space,” Cabriga highlighted. 15 She also mentioned the importance of spreading awareness on sexual orientation, gender identity and expression (SOGIE), especially inside an educational institution like QNHS.

63. PIT STOP #5 How many paragraphs are there in the body of this news story? Is this body long or short? Are the paragraphs long or short? Why is that so? What have you noticed about the number of sentences per paragraph? Are the sentences long or short? How many idea/s is/are discussed? What’s the rule if you have two sentences in one paragraph?

64. THE ENDING Ending a news article without editorializing or inserting opinions can be done effectively by focusing on factual and objective elements.

65. THE ENDING 1. Summarize Key Points. Recap the main facts or developments in the story. Examples: a. The new policy will take effect in January, impacting over 10,000 residents in the area. b . The proposed law is now awaiting the governor's signature, with both supporters and opponents closely watching the next steps.

66. THE ENDING 2. Quote a Relevant Source. Conclude with a quote from an official, expert, or person directly involved in the story. The quote should provide closure or emphasize the story’s significance. Examples: a. "We believe this initiative will make a significant difference in our community," Mayor Diaz said. b. “We are doing everything in our power to ensure this doesn't happen again," the spokesperson said.

67. THE ENDING 3. Mention Future Implications or Actions. Highlight what will happen next or what to expect in the future related to the story. Examples: a. Further discussions are expected at the upcoming summit in November. b. The new policy will be implemented starting next month, with further evaluations scheduled for early next year.

68. THE ENDING 4. Offer Additional Context. Offer a brief context or background that helps the reader understand the broader significance of the story, without drawing conclusions. Examples: a. This marks the third incident of its kind in the past year, raising concerns among local authorities. b. This development comes in the wake of similar measures adopted in neighboring cities, which have led to a marked increase in local business growth.

69. THE ENDING 5. Highlight Impact or Significance. Emphasize the significance of the story in a factual manner, showing its importance without expressing personal views. Examples: a. The new regulations are anticipated to affect over 200 businesses in the downtown area, reshaping the local economic landscape. b. This change in legislation could affect thousands of small businesses across the nation.

70. THE ENDING 6. End with a Neutral Statement. Conclude with a neutral, fact-based statement that provides closure to the story. Examples: a. The city council’s decision is now final, and implementation will proceed as scheduled. b . The court's decision marks the end of a long legal battle that began over two years ago.

71. THE ENDING 7. Use a Transition. Smoothly transition from the main body of the story to the conclusion by connecting the closing lines to the earlier parts of the article. Example: a. With the council’s decision made, the focus will now shift to the implementation phase and how it will impact the community.

72. 13 The said plan gained support from QNHS students, including Kate Cabriga, who shared some points why she is in favor of the establishment of all-gender restrooms inside the campus. 14 “I feel like if we have gender-neutral restrooms na well-managed, mas magiging comfortable ‘yung students in the midst of their transgender journey because they will not be pressured sa restrooms na feeling nila ay hindi sila belong. It’s in having a safe space,” Cabriga highlighted. 15 She also mentioned the importance of spreading awareness on sexual orientation, gender identity and expression (SOGIE), especially inside an educational institution like QNHS.

73. FORMAT OF NEWS WRITING HERE’S A SUGGESTION: 1 st paragraph: the lead (usually the what, and who of the news) 2 nd paragraph: secondary lead (bring the other w’s) 3 rd paragraph: elaboration of the most important W’S (Give the background of the event.) 4 th paragraph: quote from the key person involved 5 th to last paragraphs: other details arranged from the most to the least important

74. FORMAT OF NEWS WRITING

75. Analyzing a Sample News Story 1. Ano ang anggulo ng balitang ito? 2. Pano nasulat ang ulo ng balita? May sinusunod ba itong istruktura? 3. Anong uri ng pamatnubay ang ginamit sa artikulo? 4. Paano iniayos ang datos sa katawan ng balita? 5. Ilang talata mayroon ang mga balita? Maiikli ba o mahahaba ang mga talata? Bakit?

76. Analyzing a Sample News Story 6. Ano ang napansin nyo sa bilang ng mga pangungusap sa bawat talata? Mahahaba o maiikli ang mga pangungusap? 7. Ilang ideya/mga ideya meron bawat talata? 8. Paano kinumpol o kinlaster ang mga ideya sa katawan ng balita? 9. Kuntento ka ba sa mga impormasyong nakapaloob sa balita? 10. Meron bang mga impormasyon sa balita na hindi kaugnay? Magbigay ng halimbawa.

77. News Writing Talk Materials bit.ly/newsupskilling2024